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This is my very first work, I wonder what everyone will think of it.


Max_A_Million
You have a very energetic artstyle that you use very well! You also have a good sense of composition, which you use to make a few amazing shots like when the man is crumpled into a ball. That scene in particular was amazing. However, I think you could really improve by adding some lighter values. I felt that a lot of the panels were too dark, and it was hard to tell what was happening. Some grey values would help, as opposed to the dark parts being completely black. Also, since you did this traditionally, it would transition better to a digital format if you edited the page scans a bit. When I post my art to instagram, I usually up the contrast and make sure I take the picture in good, bright light. It may help your manga look cleaner, more appealing, and more professional. You are certainly heading in the right direction with this, I hope you keep it up!!
Shameless Soso
All right first thing I think you need to balance your spacing some shots are just way too close or feel too cramped within the paneling, try make more defined shapes that have a clear purpose like when the body is being crumbled up it's hard to tell exactly what's happening, and also have a lot of reference it allows you to base characters environment and other objects that help carry the story on real life but if you don't feel comfortable with having a reference beside, you must always make sure to be observing and bring real life inspiration to your work, like certain shapes on a tree or car or even action figures, I recommend looking up the artist Kim Jung gi on Proko, for me that's what motivates me and remind me of what I need to do to get better, observe digest and imitate, do often and have fun.
Sassan
I will share my thoughts from the perspective of someone getting a bechelors degree on manga, with my own debute series in making.
I will start with some criticism. First of all, I would encourage you to make your manga reading from Right to Left. It will help with reading it on this page. Making the whole experience much more fluid. Second thing is paneling, overall I can read all of them, but lack of spacing between panels makes whole manga unreasonably clattered. You should use thin spaces for vertical purposes and wider ones for horizontal. I would recommand closely analysing manga you admire made by pros. It helped me a lot in my process!
Another thing, yout speach bubbles have unecesserely thick out line, you could easily shrink them and leave this thickness for IMAPACTFULL moments.

crumb_fr
The art and shading is insane!
sirkrabster
This is great!! The perspectives for the cars and building are great!! Legit stopped to read just to state at them :]
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Fubuki Chiba
Good story, man. Reminds me of Tokyo Ghoul. Excited to see how the discrimination of demons plays out. Could be nice social commentary.
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Exartic
For some reason the website won't let me reply to the comments directly. Thank you so much artnpets, I'm so glad you liked it. I was so anxious putting it up but when I saw your comment I felt so relieved. Thank you.

And also thank you so much max_a_million this feedback is extremely helpful to me, I really appreciate it. I'll definitely keep in mind to take pictures of pages in better light.
I don't have a computer so it's a little difficult for me to do a lot of the fancy techniques most manga have. But I remind myself some of the absolute greatest manga were made traditionally, so I'll continue doing my best with what I have. Again thank you so much for these comments.
ArtNpets
I LOVE IT SO MUCH YOU DID SUCH A GREAT JOB THE ATTENTION TO DETAIL IS AMAZING!!!!!!!!!
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