Not as stron execution but I see what was your vision! My criticism is there a little too much "telling and not showing" and it doesn't feel as organic, but I am positive you are improving in future chapters! My bonus advice on the art is that: practice consistenty! The art isn't the worst but it's pretty obvious when you traced/referenced art! I'm bad at anatomy too so my advice is that try keeping the propotions as consistent as u can and a weaker anatomy is less jarring! I hope you keep the lineart style thou, Imlike how it's sketchy!

I dig this first chapter! I wonder who the rest of the series will pan out! I think the art is neat enough (I Especially like the colored pages) and I can see you even improved during the making of this one chapter! I am curious about the other characters and their roles in the rest of the story! (⁠.⁠ ⁠❛⁠ ⁠ᴗ⁠ ⁠❛⁠.⁠)

Nem tudom elolvasni (⁠ ⁠˵⁠ ⁠°⁠ ⁠~⁠ ⁠°⁠ ⁠˵⁠ ⁠)

This is a full of heart story

That was great

This was a cute short story , but I think the best thing about it was the artstyle. It's really stylish.

This kinda remind me to the works of One-sensei (author of One Punch Man and Mob 100) the art might be nooby , but in you're case , It's ended uplooking pretty charming , remind me of american comics from the early 20's century. The story is also interesting!

Wow. What was that?

Nice. I like the art the most. Can't wait for the 6th chapter

It was fine but if planning to make this one-shot into a full series , I would recommend making it more serious , slower and more of a charachter drama.
It has a good art too. Congrats for the monthly award. Work hard next time too.
Also fun headcanon : I think the enby people of the world live in a sky city and watches them as a sport whiel sipping tea