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Hi! I’m Smileykun! I’m an Aspiring Manga Artist!! Nice To Meet You!😁
Adding onto my previous comment- most people don’t know what the rat race is in America too! So many people wouldn’t have been able to understand your message. My suggestion is that you try to make your story more understandable for the general public next time, I think that would click with everyone better! You have great potential, I’m looking forward to seeing how high you can grow!😁
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I really enjoyed this, great job! I really liked how you included the whole “entering into the rat race” scene, that was genius!😄 you must have an entrepreneurial spirit! A tad bit of feedback for why you may not have one SMA20- I was able to enjoy this because I understood all of the references in here, however from my understanding things like the rat race are only prevalent in America. As the judges are from japan- they may not have understood your message. The point being- I feel like this was a little too Americanized, if you intend to enter SMA21, I’d suggest keeping it neutral so that the judges would better understand your story! Just a little advice😊 but as an American myself- this was amazing, I’m looking forward to your next work!😁
This was sooo good!!!! You should definitely turn it into a series! If it was this good as a ONE-SHOT, imagine the potential that it has a series! You can flesh out the world a bit and add more, this really has the potential to be a great story! Great job!😄
Adding onto my previous comment- most people don’t know what the rat race is in America too! So many people wouldn’t have been able to understand your message. My suggestion is that you try to make your story more understandable for the general public next time, I think that would click with everyone better! You have great potential, I’m looking forward to seeing how high you can grow!😁
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