Nice story Idea! The spread pages where great the panels where great but one thing the story could improve on is pacing so it's easier to follow the characters, I'm not one to be criticising (I'm a noob) but the scores are
Art 7/10
Paneling 8/10
Pacing 7/10
Story 8/10
Originality 6/10

Pretty good but like always there's room for improvement (also some of kai's and saito's dialogues are...kinda weird ngl)

Thank you so much!!

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Thank you! I your advices will be very useful for my next work!