Thank you for your comment. I agree with your points on the story and the linework is rushed too in a lot of places.

i really like the art the textures feel weird but they still have personality. i really like the backgrounds this time too. And the story is interesting enough.

Pacing and characters seem to the biggest point I've gathered so far. Your critique is helpful. Thank you for leaving a comment.

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