The ending caught me by surprise for real! Really great improvement from your last published work ! If I could give one suggestion , it would be to not use the double page spread too much. I felt like the first one when his friend fell through the fence was good and maybe the 4 page one towards the end (which btw 2 pages are off centered) were the only two necessary but having about 5 or so of them took the impact effect away for me . All in all i’m very proud!

I appreciate it! Yeah this work is obsolete to me at this point but if you want to see a closer glimpse of what my ability is now , check out my instagram @todoonesbest. My newest manga and illustrations are on there. Cheers!

Thank you !! I DM’d you on insta

I’ll be honest this is one of the best critiques I got for this . The fact that it was not general enough never crossed my mind! This will help me a lot in my current project thank you so much.