Well, It simply amazing, I hope that You work with a famous magazine like shounen jump.
But Here something I noticed which was the sfx I think you needed to add English translation for these Japanese sound effects to make your Manga easier to read for non-Japanese readers. Here is my rate out of 10: (9.5/10)

Oh, great job. It looks amazing and I really enjoyed reading it.
U can check out my manga I've lately made (Other dimension).
It's my first manga too.
https://medibang.com/mpc/episodes/po2409112239378760026704824/

I've read it, actually your are talented and I really had fun reading it. As it's your first manga, it's simply amazing. I hope u be a popular mangaka in the future.
U can check out my manga, actually it's my first manga too 😅
https://medibang.com/mpc/episodes/po2409112239378760026704824/

Thx😊

Nice work.
U can check my manga out
https://medibang.com/mpc/episodes/po2409112239378760026704824/

Wow, It was amazing 😂
U can check out my manga Other dimension
https://medibang.com/mpc/episodes/po2409112239378760026704824/

Amazing 💯

Thx, sis

Bro, it's simply amazing. Everything : paneling, artstyle, the way of story telling
Were all perfect 💯
Check out mine:
https://medibang.com/mpc/episodes/po2409112239378760026704824/

Thx😊