English , Japanese / Hobby
I'm Mossy! Also known as Zelda Fea! I love manga and anime and hope to one day draw manga/comics. I hope you enjoy any stories I post here!
My background as a Manga Creator
I created my own webcomic for a while and have done a couple of one shots. I took a break from creating my webcomic when I injured my arm. Before that I created a couple one shots, some of them I published on art street for competitions. I sort of gave up on my dreams of being a manga creator but something about reading everyone’s stories here gave me a bit of hope again. When I get back to creating comics regularly I will change my creator level to aspiring pro again!
It’s really good the art especially! I do think the main character could be a little more distinct though, maybe add something sticking to his hat or something to add something else to the silhouette? But I love the detail and the backgrounds. I do think however that you need to show and not tell. It’s okay to not tell us about the ability to teleport because you can show us. And there’s no need to tell us that the protagonist is the one teleporting and killing those guys it should be shown instead. I’m not saying it’s bad but once you find the balance between dialogue and art it’ll elevate the story to a new level. It can be tempting to reveal everything to the reader right away but you can keep some of that info a secret to sprinkle in later in shorter bursts. A good practice can be writing a story without any dialogue! But I think this is really well made! There isn’t much I could say about the story itself since you haven’t gotten too far yet but good luck to you!
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